Newbie Subber-trying this out. Bare with me as I attempt to post an excerpt of my current WIP... An idea, which I have 11chapters done on first draft. IS IT OKAY TO TEST THIS OUT ON YOU GUYS?
Hmmm. First impression: You can write, alright. The hook was good, the story kept my attention.
The twist surprised me, and I had to think honestly about it. You mentioned that Kelly was in therapy and taking hormone shots. This was consistent with your story, it flowed naturally, and it made sense.
Is it my cup of tea? Not really, but I will continue to read it as long as it continues to make sense.
Part of me wants to find out if Kelly goes through the transition surgeries or if he falls in love with Jenn and stays a guy. Either way, it should be interesting.
Well done, Diana!
Thanks for reading
Hmmm. First impression: You can write, alright. The hook was good, the story kept my attention.
The twist surprised me, and I had to think honestly about it. You mentioned that Kelly was in therapy and taking hormone shots. This was consistent with your story, it flowed naturally, and it made sense.
Is it my cup of tea? Not really, but I will continue to read it as long as it continues to make sense.
Part of me wants to find out if Kelly goes through the transition surgeries or if he falls in love with Jenn and stays a guy. Either way, it should be interesting.
Not bad for your first story.
Thank you for giving me a chance.
Of course always, love any input. diny123@msn.com you're the best.
Can I send this back to you with some edits for consistency? I love the premise so far…please make sure I have your email address! Joan
STILL learning this App, and it's much harder on the phone. diny123@msn.com
Yes! Try it out, girl!