I like it a lot! I didn't find anything awkward about it, but I may not be the best person to ask. I found it completely engaging and it flowed well. I might want to see some more visuals so I can picture how people look a bit better, but that is only my thing.
YOUR comments are priceless, I will strive to be more visceral and descriptively accurate. Thanks for the time you took to really read it, Write on dear one, Di
I like it a lot! I didn't find anything awkward about it, but I may not be the best person to ask. I found it completely engaging and it flowed well. I might want to see some more visuals so I can picture how people look a bit better, but that is only my thing.
YOUR comments are priceless, I will strive to be more visceral and descriptively accurate. Thanks for the time you took to really read it, Write on dear one, Di
Thank you!